I entered this into a contest. I haven’t written a structured poem in quite some time, so I welcome your honest feedback!

I liked it a lot.
Has a very lyrical quality about it; like i could put this to music very easily.

Reminds me of a summer fling i had when i was a lot younger. And I never forgot that one girl, and always hoped i’d get to see her again someday.

As it turns out, I will see her this friday for the first time in nearly 10 years.
Crazy huh? So this brings back memories for me; so i really connected to it.

hey i wrote you a sequel

Lovely Shakespearean sonnet. :) Thank you for not ending each thought at the end of a line – seriously, that ends up making sing-song sound in a bad way. Your meter is good, accurate enough without being forced.

Thought/ suggestion – given the change of focus on line 8, this could work better as a Petrachan/ Italian sonnet. Shakespearean sonnets usually have three similar themed verses summed up with the final epigram (I do like your epigram) whereas Petrachan sonnets have a change in focus (Cesura) after line 8, or on line 8. Their rhyme is very different, though – abba/abba/ cdecde (cdcdcd) – so it’d be a bunch of work.

Nicely done. I do love a good sonnet. :)

Sheer poetry …as they say. Delightful

Ana, it looks like reading all that poetry pays off. Normally, structured poems end up as pure cheese, but it enhances this one! Your poetry is great. Good luck with the contest!

This is really good. I don’t know much about structure, and meter, and other thinks like that, but I like it =)

I fell in love tonight….thats how awesome this was!

I was inspired to write an sequel
I hope you like it.